Monday poetry train - Feather
This post is only for people over the age of 18 and might offend some- Cette entrée vise un auditoire adulte et peut offencer certains.
So this is my first try at something like this. I just had an idea while visiting Lisa Andel this week, when I saw the picture. I'm nervous, because I don't have as much as experience as some of you in this kind of writing. It might be a while before I write another short storie.
If you want a word translated in french, maybe even in Acadian(if i can find how to write it) post it with your comment./ Donc, ceci est mon premier essaie dans ce type de nouvelle. J'ai eu l'idée en visitant le site de Lisa Andel cette semaine, en voyant cette photo. Je suis nerveuse, car je n'ai pas aussitant d'expérience que certines d'entre vous dans ce type d'écriture. De plus, ça risque d'être la dernière nouvelle pour un bout!!
Il m'Avait laissé, ce matin, un message sur le comptoir:
Ce soir, viens me rencontrer au chalet. Une nuit de plaisir et d'aventure
t'y attend.À ce soir,ma belle, Logan...
Sur la table, il a déposé plein d'accesoires. Je vérifies que le foular avec lequel il s'est attaché est bien sérré. Je choisi une plume d'autruche. Je commence son supplice: je promène la plume sur son visage, descend le long de son cou, dans son dos aux muscles définis. Laisse la plume se promener le long de la line de son dos, lui chatouille les fesses. Je le sens frémir.
La porte s'ouvre...Je tire les cordons de mon corset pour essayer de cacher mes seins. Logan a trouvé une serviette. Un labrador jaune entre. Il va directement vers Logan. Il n'a pas totalement perdu son érection... Le chien lui saute surle dos, il fait tomber la serviette. Logan essaie de la reprendre. Le chien croit à un jeu, tire sur la serviette.
.Tonight, meet me at the cottage. A night of pleasure and adventure awaited
youTonight, beautiful, Logan
I put much attention in how I dress : a black corset, that finer my waist, a lace pantie, garder and stocking under a suit that put my every curve in advantage. But I have to wait all day!!!
At work, I cannot concentrate. A thousand images come to my mind... The keyboard and the screen seem so far away because my attention is so far. My watch, I look it every 5 minutes. Time seems to have stop to play tricks on me!
Finaly 4:30...
After I made sure everything was in the right place, I can finaly go on the road of the cottage.
I'm finally there. Logan's car is already there. A shiver runs through my back. What does my lover has prepare for me
I enter....
Here he is, attache to the chandelier. I only see his back. He is in his birthday suit. I cannot help myself but to look at his butt. Hum... Logan has the greatest ass that I ever saw.
-Hey Logan!
-Hi Ali, are you coming, or are you gonna make me wait longer?
On the table, he has put many accesoiries. I check that the scarf that hold him to the chandelier is well attach. I choose an otrich feather. I start his torture: I make the featther go on his face, I slowly go down on his neck, on his muscular back. I let the feather touch the line of his back, I tickle his butt. I feel him shiver.
I go in front of him, at a meter so he cannot touch me, I take off my blazer. I discover to him the corset where my breast his full. I slowly walk to him, and whisper, while bitting his ear: "Do you want me to take of the rest of my clothes?" I only hear a moan in respond. I walk away, unzipped my skirt, and let it fall at my feet and let him discover the stocking and the garder. I walk to get an ice cube, making my hips move scandiliously. I slowly undo the front of my corset. I rub the icecube against his right nipple, and making sure that not droplet is left after. I do the same thing with his left one. I gently bite it. I'm feeling his cock becoming harder against my body. I take off my panties, wrap my legs around his waist, and slowly lowering myself so he will penetrate me...- Ali, didn't you heard something?
-Only you, Logan, shivering from desire...
-Stop a minute. Listen.
We carefully listen. We hear footstep. Logan is naked, in an erection. I have him into me with an open corset.
-Damn, there somebody, said Logan.
-Usualy, nobody come during this season
-Untach me!
-I cannot undo them... Finaly, they undo.
We hear a key into the lock. I cannot help but look at Logan a seconde. His body, even if he is searching for some clothes, is ready to really take me. I put my panties back on.
The door opens...I pull the string of my corset, trying to hide my breast. Logan has found a towel. A yellow labrador enters. He goes directly for Logan. Logan hasen't lost completly his erection... The dog jump on him, making the towel fall. Logan tries to put it back on. The dog, believing he wants to play, pull it completly off and run
I see the persons enter. Shit, I say to myself, when I see the persons enter.
Libellés : short story
11 Comments:
At 5:07 a.m., Anonyme said…
The translation needs some polishing
At 9:51 a.m., T.A.Chase said…
Jill,
That was a great scene. Nice little surprise at the end. Thanks for hopping on the Poetry train with us.
At 10:42 a.m., Rhian said…
jill - that was delightfully erotic with a fabulous funny twist at the end!
At 11:20 a.m., Anonyme said…
Can you imagine? Well you did but still.... This was great.
At 11:31 a.m., Amy Ruttan said…
Great scene if you expanded on it a bit more it could be quite the little novella. Ok there's the erotic romance writer coming out in me. Of course I love the ending that was hilarious.
At 11:34 a.m., Sparky Duck said…
there is definetly a good start there. Plus, the ending is funny because darn it if it does not ring true
At 12:54 p.m., Jill said…
Gautami, thank for being direct. I thought so myself, I was in a hurry translating it, and it was late, I was not satisfy with the result of the translation, I guess it show!!
T.A., the pleasure of reading all of you is a good reward for doing it!
Rhian, thanks
Nancy, say what is on your mind!! I like as much the good comment, than the critics!!
Amy, this is not the kind of story I'm use to writting. I was in a hurry this weekend, so it was written pretty fast.
Sparky, got caught with your pants down??
At 2:37 p.m., Susan Helene Gottfried said…
Well done, Jill! Love the end! (and Sparky's revelation, too)
If you want to take Amy up on her suggestion, I'm sure you'd have any number of friends helping with the translation!
At 2:46 p.m., Anonyme said…
".... I take off my panties, wrap my legs around his waist, and slowly lowering myself so he will penetrate me......"
Nothing wrong with this part of the translation!
Well done jill! You saucy minx you!
At 10:38 p.m., Ann said…
Great story, loved the ending. That was too funny.
P.S. You've inspired me, I'm trying to read in French, I figure if I keep it up eventually I might get back to the vocabulary of a 5th grader. :)
At 12:19 a.m., Julia Phillips Smith said…
How I love the image of the lover waiting, tied to the chandelier...
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